Joshua
@JKAmovies
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jamriot
Nice work! If you've ever heard of the game Soma, this situation reminds me of the main character, Simon, and his realization that he is just another robot. I like the way you write this dialogue, but I feel as though you could have done more with this realization and with the explanation given by AIHD. If they were willing to do this to him, then what else might they be willing to do to subdue him? Nice read overall and thank you for participating!
JKAmovies
Thank you for leaving a comment, and I haven't heard of Soma but might have to check that one out. I agree that I could have delved deeper into the characters and story, but before I knew it I was running on mere hours to get it proofed and posted... Next time I'll plan more efficiently :)